Extra Credit

1) I read the collaboration story based on a civilization believing only on lies. The context was intriguing, however the amount of grammatical errors caused me to lose interest quickly. Lines such as "We are hiding in the cafeteria, with a glance of my eye I caught glimpse of the Enemy," and beginning a sentence with "Serving one purpose; to annihilate all and any trace of truth," downplayed the stature of the writing tremendously. The sentence "There are only so few of with the same mentality that we must resort to the worst of company to find those with similar views," had an intended meaning, the attempt was feeble and resulted in a vague and messy sentence. 

2) As we hid in the cafeteria, a black swoosh shot through my side vision; the Enemy had been spotted. Instead of just abruptly beginning the sentence with "Serving one purpose...," I would instead write, "The Enemy good for one deed and one only; annihilating all and any trace of the truth." Also, I found the last sentence to be awful. "As my last breath slowly escaped my lips, so did my very last thought: a strange image of Tyler, dancing the can-can whilst being chased down by a rogue ice cream truck." The theme throughout the story is mysterious, dark, and gives off the impression that the narrator is constantly running from something. Including a sentence like the last one once again downplayed the literature, causing the reader not to take the writing as seriously as it should be taken. 

3) I agree with the moral. If I could re-write it, mine would look something like this. 

The people of the Thratt cult see their "world" through the eyes on their peers, not able to create a personal outlook. Under the constant rule of anyone but themselves, they live a life staying strictly in the lane of the norm. This reflects, in some ways, of the dominance modern teachers have on their students. What they say, we believe, wit the occasional questions asked. The wisdom our professors provide us with is not necessarily lies however, unlike what the Regime is embedding in the brain of their students, and instead their intention is nothing but positive. However, it is crucial to have a say in all aspects of your life, no matter how taboo some situations may seem. Whether it is defending your argument in class or discussing your unexpected grade with a teacher, it is vital to stay true to oneself.